Tips to Avoid Common Pitfalls in your Story

When is this book going to come out?
Only time will tell!

By Linda Wilson   @LinWilsonauthor

How long does it take to write, edit, and polish a children’s book—or any book—for publication? This is a question I’ve been grappling with for several years now as I seek to complete the second book in my Abi Wunder Mystery trilogy, Secret in the Mist.

The book seemed to be finished many times through countless edits by critique groups, hours of self-editing, and reviews by two beta readers. Lately, the manuscript was reviewed by professional editors—www.chriseboch.com and https://two4onekidcritiques.wixsite.com/mysite/rates, both offering very helpful comments.

Upon receipt of each critique, I made the appropriate changes and set the manuscript aside to “rest.” Each time I picked it up again I discovered more edits, some quite extensive. This process has taken years.

My feelings have ranged from pure frustration—the desire to pull my hair out and yell, when will this ever end—to acceptance; as in, every change brings a more entertaining, tightly written, page-turner. 

My goal with this article is to outline the pitfalls I’ve encountered in preparing Secret in the Mist for publication. Being aware of these pitfalls will hopefully save you time and effort.

Editing Challenges to Avoid

• Stick to the overall plan of the book: Perhaps the most important challenge for me was to keep track of the “whole picture.” I told myself I was following my outline (I’m not a pantser). But I got caught up in week-to-week changes suggested by my critique group. I would edit the changes and move on to the next section for them to read. I got lost. I didn’t know where my story was going, and I included too many unimportant events that I thought made the story exciting. It wasn’t true. I had strayed from what the story was really about. Now I realize I should have hung my outline on the wall in front of my desk to remind me where I was going. I will do that from now on.
• Stick to the story problem: Make everything that happens in the story about the story problem. I like to use the example of an edit Chris Eboch did of my first Abi Wunder book, Secret in the Stars. I had an entire chapter about kittens, which was an adorable addition and very entertaining, I thought. Chris let me down lightly. She understood how much love I put into that chapter. But she said it didn’t move the story forward. It had to go. The removal of that chapter didn’t make an iota of difference in the book--it had nothing to do with the plot. But I’ve kept the chapter for possible use in advertising or even in another story.
• Know which details to include: I’ve fit in necessary details to show what the characters look like, what they wear, etc.; a rich sense of the setting in a country town, including trails in the woods; and other details as important elements in the story. But in my zeal to include details, I included minutia, details that turned out to be unimportant, and didn’t move the story forward. 
• Remember to include the senses: I find “taste” to be the most challenging sense. One way is to describe a meal, which I think readers enjoy.
• Scrutinize for any passages that slow or stop the action: Action parts are not the time to describe anything. Short sentences give the feeling of immediacy. Keep the story moving forward. Delete any passages that bog the story down.
• “Telling” and “Showing”: Study up on how to handle “telling” and “showing.”  Both can be effective if you know how to use them. What has surprised me is how many “telling” passages I use when “showing” would be much more engaging.
• Watch overuse of certain words: Here are some of my favorites: just, down, back, look, to name a few. I do a word search and reword sentences to avoid using certain words too often.
• Tie up loose threads: One of the ways I try to carry through with characters, themes, symbols, is to do a search of each word. I give each character an arc. The main character needs to grow, so I follow her path through the story to make sure her growth is achieved. The other characters have story arcs, also, with a beginning, middle, and end. Mention of symbols such as ladybugs for good luck, a treasured locket given to Abi by her grandma, the appearances of the ghost, need to have follow-through and a satisfying ending. Each needs a reason to be in the story, needs to help move the story forward, and also needs to keep from being repetitious. 
• Be on the lookout for any descriptions or actions that are vague. Make them specific.

If you're like me, you will take the time necessary to produce a book worthy of your readers, no matter how long it takes to complete.

Before I knew about shredding,
these were the drafts I edited
before publishing Secret in the Stars.

Linda's two new releases are Botas Altas, the Spanish version of Tall Boots, translated by Graciela Moreno and Adriana Botero, and Cuna en la Naturaleza, the Spanish version of Cradle in the Wild, translated by Adriana Botero. Visit Linda at https://bit.ly/3AOM98L.

The WEB: Your Writing at Risk

How The Web Can Kill Your Writing Career

By Carolyn Howard-Johnson, author of the multi award-winning The Frugal Editor

I recently read a grammar and editing column in my local newspaper, the Glendale News-Press. In  June Casagrande’s “A Word Please,” she groused about the problems so many writers having with hyphens. She noted the sad (or not so sad) influence of the Web on our grammar, punctuation, and style choices and there are enough of them to give the average author who pulled down As in English a big headache!

June mentioned the disappearing hyphen as one of the things we authors must contend with. but that is just the beginning. The Net also encourages us to push all kinds of words together. Let’s call that the "domain name influence" or, perhaps the domainnameinfluence or maybe #hashtaginfluence. Do we write “book” or “bookcover?” “Bookfair” or “book fair?” “Backmatter” or “back matter?” “Hard copy” or “hardcopy?”

You’ll never know because generally the trusted Chicago Style Guide doesn’t weigh in on these trends and dictionaries haven’t caught up with the quickly changing domainnameinfluence or the #hashtaginfluence either. And the spell checker in Word? Well, it doesn’t put a red squiggle under either “Hard copy” or “hardcopy.” That leaves the writer—whether she’s writing fiction or a resume in a style-choice pickle.

In The Frugal Editor, I suggest the zero-tolerance approach to keep authors out of hot water with agents and publishers (and therefore make it more likely they'll get published).

Still, I admit I love to stick words together. It isn’t really a new thing. I mean, word-bonding is a time-honored tradition in English. The word therefore is an example. We’ve been using words like that for eons. Word-gluing goes back to the English language’s Germanic roots. German is a creative language. The Deutsch do things like push the words for finger and hat together to make the word for thimble (fingerhut).

Poets have pushed words together for ages, too. So, except when I am trying to get something like a pitch or a query or a book proposal past a gatekeeper, I make combined-word style choices for myself and let the so-called rules be damned.

We authors can have it our way—we just need to be careful where we choose to exercise our independence!

Back to the zero-tolerance thing. If you want to impress a literary agent or prospective boss, please don't put hyphens in words they are convinced are correct only one way. If you think your contact believes it's nonfiction, not non-fiction, there is no point flaunting your style choice.

You won’t get a red squiggle with either version from your Word spell checker (or spellchecker), but that doesn’t mean your run-of-the-mill agent or future employer won’t be more judgmental.

I could go on and on about the way the web has mislead us. It practically coaxes us to overuse ampersands and most don’t have the faintest idea we’re being misled. We see question marks and exclamation points and caps and titles overused.

What if we emulate those affectations because they start to become so familiar we think they’re being used correctly?

Agents and publishers will hate it, that’s what. And that can be disastrous for our careers.

Then there is improperly punctuated dialogue. We see it on the web and even in books. There are many other grammar idiosyncrasies that your English teacher never told you but that are sure to annoy the feature editor at The New York Times or the powerful agent you want to impress.

The list is endless. Lucky that writers have June Casagrande's grammar books like Grammar Snobs Are Great Big Meanies (Penguin), and my multi award-winning book, The Frugal Editor,  to help them through the grammar and syntax swamps, isn’t it.

Note: June's column may be read in the Glendale News-Press's website and she is the author of two of Carolyn’s favorite grammar books, Grammar Snobs Are Great Big Meanies, and The Best Punctuation Book. Period.

ABOUT THE AUTHOR AND A COUPLE READING TIPS

Carolyn Howard-Johnson brings her experience as a publicist, journalist, marketer, and retailer to the advice she gives in her HowToDoItFrugally series of books for writers and the many classes she taught for nearly a decade as instructor for UCLA Extension’s world-renown Writers’ Program. All her books for writers are multi award winners including the first edition of The Frugal Book Promoter, and the second. Her The Frugal Editor, now in its second edition, won awards from USA Book News, Readers’ Views Literary Award, the marketing award from Next Generation Indie Books and others including the coveted Irwin award. Her most recent book in series is , How to Get Great Book Reviews Frugally and Ethically: The ins and outs of using free reviews to build and sustain a writing career

Howard-Johnson is the recipient of the California Legislature’s Woman of the Year in Arts and Entertainment Award, and her community’s Character and Ethics award for her work promoting tolerance with her writing. She was also named to Pasadena Weekly’s list of “Fourteen San Gabriel Valley women who make life happen” and was given her community’s Diamond Award for Achievement in the Arts.