Great Sky: One more Valentine freebie

Valentine's Day is impending. Are you ignoring it this year?  Rebelling against yet another commercially driven effort to part you from your hard earned money?  If you're visiting this blog you're probably a writer, so why not use your writing talents to say something meaningful to someone you care about?  Write a poem for Valentine's Day. Why not? You could pen something quirky and funny, or deep and powerful - poetry can often 'say' things that prose strains at. If you need inspiration, or want to provide a lovely, no-cost gift to someone you care about, there's still time. From now until the 17th of Feb, drop by Smashwords and use coupon code EL42C for a completely free copy of the love poetry book Cherished Pulse, by Carolyn Howard-Johnson and me. Below is a poem from the book, set in a lovely little village in Buckhamshire in the UK, nor far where I used to live in Oxford.  Now it's your turn. 

 Great Sky

At Brill on the Hill (with the windmill)
the sky ominous
a purple bruise threatened to knock
us off the bikes
Nixy’s little mill tenuous
perched alone,
six hundred feet above sea level
no trees to buffer the wind
more than three centuries
of lovebirds
non conformists
showing off calve strength
as they worked their way towards
a pint at the The Pheasant Inn.

We were more tenuous.

Healthy children
our eyes wide with the cold
wild landscape
hungry for our future
the warm taste of flesh.

Your red and white leathers
seemed bolder
than the great sky
bigger than the bleak landscape
and grassed over clay pits
when you took my hand
for the first time
pulled me down
out of the wind.

No going back.

The windmill kept turning
the Pheasant
churning
hearty ploughmen’s
while we rode off
into adulthood.

Red and white bravado may be gone
with the purple clouds
and cracked leathers
of our childhood
but hunger remains.

Don’t let age blind you.
Under my crepe paper skin
lies a beating heart
blood moving bravely
through veins and arteries
Pull me down
out of the wind
like you used to.

Magdalena Ball runs The Compulsive Reader. She is the author of the novel Black Cow, Sleep Before Evening, the poetry books Repulsion Thrust and Quark Soup, a nonfiction book The Art of Assessment, and, in collaboration with Carolyn Howard-Johnson, Deeper Into the Pond, Blooming Red, Cherished Pulse, She Wore Emerald Then, and Imagining the Future. She also runs a radio show, The Compulsive Reader Talks. Find out more about Magdalena and grab your free copy of her Quark Soup at http://www.magdalenaball.com

 

Get Organized For Less Stress!


 One of my writing friends likes to say, "The dirty dishes never seem so important as when I am struggling to write." I know what she means -- when facing the blank page or empty Word document, or when I'm 200 words into my writing for the day and already feeling as empty as my car's gasoline tank, it seems like anything else would be more appealing than staying there in front of my computer screen typing or pressing my pen again and again to the notebook page. When that time comes, and the dirty dishes call, it is best to ignore them. Stay put. Butt-in-chair. Keep writing. In the writing manual Ron Carlson Writes a Story, he urges that this is when the magic happens -- when you push through the distractions and stay there in the story.

But, after my writing time is over for the day, I'm going to attack those dirty dishes. When I get home, instead of collapsing immediately on the couch, I'm going to take ten seconds to hang up my jacket, put away all the groceries, place my keys in that little dish by the door so I can find them the next day. This year, I am going to get -- and stay -- organized. That is the gift I am giving myself to cut back on stress, to make an already busy semester less hectic than it needs to be.

When my surroundings are neat and free of clutter, my mind feels less cluttered, too. I feel calmer. And the funny thing is, once you get organized, it is easier to stay organized -- it just takes a few minutes every day to keep that way. And really, how much harder is it for me to file that important paper away in my file cabinet than to set it on the kitchen table, where it will continue to take up my mental space before getting lost or buried underneath other stuff, alluding me when I am frantically looking for it weeks later? Answer: actually a heck of a lot easier to just file it away from the get-go.

Today, in between working on my novel, going to the gym, and preparing my lesson plans for the week, I am going to take half an hour to clean out my backpack and purse. I am going to sort through the papers scattered on my desk and kitchen table. I am going to make a list for the grocery store instead of winging it and forgetting something I need.

I am going to get organized, and stay that way! Will you join me?

Dallas Woodburn is the author of two award-winning collections of short stories and editor of Dancing With The Pen: a collection of today's best youth writing. Her short fiction has been nominated for a Pushcart Prize three years in a row and her nonfiction has appeared in a variety of national publications including Family Circle, Writer's Digest, The Writer, and The Los Angeles Times. She is the founder of Write On! For Literacy and Write On! Books Youth Publishing Company and is currently pursuing her Master's degree in Fiction Writing at Purdue University, where she teaches undergraduate writing courses and serves as Assistant Fiction Editor of Sycamore Review.

Avoiding Extraneous Words

I recently learned a new term: Pleonasm. Is it a murder suspect? A graffiti artist? A practical joker?

Turns out, it’s nothing quite so mysterious. A pleonasm is a word or phrase, which can be removed from a sentence without changing its meaning. For example, John walked to the chair and sat down. “Down” is a pleonasm and can be removed without changing the meaning of the sentence.

Although I was not familiar with the term, I did know them when I saw them. In fact, part of my editing advice revolves around deleting extraneous words. Words such as “that,” “very,” “both,” and “there was.” Others might include “began,” “started,” or “continued.”

Here’s another phrase that nearly everyone is guilty of: “The sky held a myriad of stars.” Myriad means “countless.” So the correct use is “The sky held myriad stars.” (Simply substitute the word countless for myriad.) That eliminates two extraneous words.

And then there is the word “unique.” We are inundated with varying degrees of “uniqueness” every day: “That was a rather unique movie.” “Your story is very unique.” What’s next—uniquely unique? Unique means “the only one of its kind.” Unique is unique. It doesn’t need any modifiers

I also caution to watch use of “ly” words. These words are often used to prop up weak verbs. For example: “She walked quickly” can be stronger if written “She strode” (or bounded or rushed). Likewise with the “to be” verbs (was, were, had been, etc.) especially when used with an “ing” verb. “She was walking” is better as “She walked.”

Some authors like to use taglines (he said, she said) plus an action: “…she said, taking a sip of coffee.” The simple action is sufficient: “She took a sip of coffee.”
You also don’t need to describe two actions at once: She nodded and smiled. He puffed himself up and took a swig...

A writer friend of mine is looking at every sentence in her manuscript and challenging herself to remove at least one word from each. She has cut 14,000 words from a 400-page manuscript.

I challenge you to go one step farther: see if you can delete an entire phrase from a sentence, an entire sentence from a paragraph, a paragraph from a scene.
Hunt down and exterminate those “Pesky Pleonasms.”

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A native Montanan, Heidi M. Thomas now lives in Northwest Washington. Her first novel, Cowgirl Dreams, is based on her grandmother, and the sequel, Follow the Dream, has recently won the national WILLA Award. Heidi has a degree in journalism, a certificate in fiction writing, and is a member of Northwest Independent Editors Guild. She teaches writing and edits, blogs, and is working on the next books in her “Dare to Dream” series.

Write From the Heart: LINE UP THE TIMELINE

Check out my friend's posting on setting up a timeline in your story -

Faye's book To Tell The Truth will be free for downloading on Kindle only February 8 through February 10. If you like some romance and a lot of suspense, check it out

Write From the Heart: LINE UP THE TIMELINE: When writing my book, To Tell the Truth, there was one of many elements I forgot to include. It was the hardest for me to correct, my effort...


 $4.00 fix
 
It’s hard to believe that we are facing yet another gift giving season.  We just finished paying for Santa’s run and now Cupid is hot on our heels.  As a woman, I am here to tell you that a gift really doesn’t have to cost much money but it does have to meet a couple of specific criteria: it has to be personal (I have to know that you know me) and the gift has to show me you took time in planning and getting it.  These two things hold true whether the gift is from a female friend or a romantic interest.

 Here is an example of a gift that didn’t work and how it could have been a success with a little extra effort.  A boy, we will call him Sam, bought a gift for his girl friend, Jane.  To Sam’s credit, he purchased it, wrapped it and gave it to her following a nice dinner.  Sam was terribly confused and surprised when Jane unwrapped the gift and burst into tears.  Sam just didn’t understand why Jane was not happy with the jumper cables he had bought her.  She had been having trouble with her car battery for Pete’s sake.

Now for the $4 solution that would have made the same gift work.  The jumper cables were a good idea, but they failed to meet the two specified criteria.  When asked if Sam knew Jane’s favorite candy bar he said “Sure, she loves Snickers” and when asked if she liked flowers he answered “yes”.  Sam could have purchased the jumper cables, in an effort to protect Jane, and then stopped by a local convenience store.  There he could have purchased two Snickers and clamped the wrapper of each into one of the cable clamps.  Usually, convenience stores sell carnations or some other flower in a water vile so Sam could have purchased a flower and laid it across the other set of clamps.  When she unwrapped the present Jane would truly know that the present was meant for her; it contained her favorite candy and a flower.  $4 extra dollars would have made the difference.  Most men don’t believe me, but ask any woman and she will agree.  So, if you are buying a gift for a woman, whether you are a man or a woman, follow those two simple rules and you will be sure to get a gift that will be sincerely appreciated.

 PS. Unless she specifically asks, don’t buy her a vacuum, a blender or any other practical gift that will make her life easier.  On special occasions she wants to feel special not useful.

PSS. Books are always a hit so make sure to check out some of our great authors. Just take a look to your right under contributors and you can click on their links.

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What Is Your Favorite Book?

I was recently asked to list my all-time favorite book. After a lot of thinking I realized I couldn’t do that. I have so many that have touched my life and my writing it would be impossible to choose one. The Lord of the Ring series has influenced me through my love of dragons and mythical creatures, world and language creation as well as how people treat one another. My current WIP series is heavily influenced by JRR Tolkien’s vision.


Then there’s The Good Earth by Pearl S. Buck which I read as a teen. Scenes from that book have haunted me since. I learned so much about Chinese culture and history from that book. I’ve even adopted a Vietnamese child.

1984 by George Orwell is one I’ve read several times over the decades. It is timeless and meaningful in any society at any given moment. I love its dark nature and the struggle for freedoms that we take for granted; the right to love whomever we choose, the right to READ.

Along those same lines I love The Giver by Lois Lowry. Again it is dark with spears of light and warmth. The reader grows along with the main character and you find yourself crying, rejoicing or mourning whenever he does. Few stories have moved me the way that one did.

And of course I adore ALL of the Harry Potter books. The characters are lovable, quirky, fun to read about and the darkness of the story is heavily punctuated with light-hearted moments. I only wish my own writing could be as universally read and my characters as universally loved.

Thirty years ago I picked up a new novel by an author new to me at the time. The novel was the first of The Sword of Shannara trilogy. Those books blew my socks off. It was while reading Terry Brooks’ stuff as well as David Eddings’s Belgariad series I conceived my own series. And then there was the Chronicles of Prydain series by Lloyd Alexander—awesome MG Fantasy. These lead me to Susan Coopers’s series of The Dark is Rising series and Philip Pullman’s His Dark Materials series. While writing I kept all of these wonderful books in my head to draw from.

So, do you think you could choose ONE book that has inspired you? If so, what would it be? It not, what are the top few books you would list and why?



Rebecca Ryals Russell writes MG and YA Dark Fantasy while living with her family in a Victorian house on five acres of North Florida countryside. She also runs a Vacation Rental Log House on the property: Florida Black Bear Cabin.

Be sure to check out the special interactive Middle Grade Reader website Tween Word Quest for tons of information about Stardust Warriors as well as the other projects Rebecca has in the works and Under the Hat for all of her other works.

Write Another Book, For Pete's Sake!!!


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Some of the best advice I’ve heard in a while came from one of my Yahoo! Writers Groups. The discussion was promoting your book:

Member Post: You can definitely promote too much and people get sick of hearing about the author and the book. Especially if it's always the same title. I just roll my eyes and say, "Write another book, for Pete's sake"!

Simple, yet powerful. Fortunately, I recently released the follow up to Breakthrough titled Opening! Here is one of my blurbs I'm sending out:


“A scientific breakthrough of such magnitude it could radically alter the future of humanity—for better or worse—is in the wrong hands”

Stephen Tremp, author of the BREAKTHROUGH series, has a B.A. in information systems and an MBA degree in global management. Stephen has a background in information systems, management, and finance and draws from this varied and complex experiential knowledge to write one-of-a-kind thrillers.

His novels are enhanced by current events at the European Organization for Nuclear Research (CERN) and other scientific research facilities around the world. These potential advances have the ability to change the way we perceive our universe and our place in it!


Stephen Tremp is author of the recently released suspense thriller OPENING, the second book in the BREAKTHROUGH series. You can visit Stephen at Breakthrough Blogs. Opening is available for download at:

Amazon for $1.99
Smashwords for $1.99


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