Before Publishing: Proof it Once, Twice, Ten Times...

 

 

 

Contributed by Karen Cioffi, Children's Writer

 

While proofreading is the final editing stage, the final frontier, does it guarantee an error-free manuscript, article, blog post, or other form of writing?

Well, no.

Years ago, I reviewed picture books for Sylvan Dell (renamed in 2014 to Arbordale Publishing), which was, at the time, a pretty big publishing company. When I finished a math-focused picture book, I glanced at the back pages. The last spread was filled with simple math problems like
2 + 4 = 6.

Well, one of the answers was wrong. I checked it over and over. It was wrong.

I quickly emailed the woman I worked with at Sylvan Dell and let her know. She thanked me, and I never heard from her again.

Guaranteed someone got in a lot of trouble over that mistake. As far as I remember, I didn’t get Review Copies of books. The books were already published.

Another example of finding an error in a published book is a book I helped self-publish for a client.

Dealing with picture books adds another element of proofing.

Near the end of one ghosting and publishing project, the client wanted the word "Australia" added to an umbrella in an interior illustration. The story text had been meticulously edited and proofed, but I didn't check the spelling of Australia in the illustration.  

Not realizing there was an error, I helped the author self-publish it in paperback, hardcover, and ebook formats. A buyer contacted the author to let her know the word Australia was spelled wrong!

I check everything else in illustrations for consistency and accuracy. But I hadn't thought about that one word. Lesson learned.

I immediately contacted the illustrator and took care of it. Then, I republished the book.

Spelling errors in illustrations isn't something Grammarly or ProWritingAid can help with. And I don't know if a proofreader would get involved with proofing illustrations.   

My point is that there are NO guarantees in producing a 100% error-free book.

As a ghostwriter and editor, I take all kinds of precautions to ensure my clients’ work and my own work is error-free.

I use Grammarly and ProWritingAid. I also, at times, use a proofreader. I also suggest my clients read through their manuscripts, keeping an eye out for errors.

You can’t be too careful.

I even use Grammarly for my blog posts and other content I create.

But even so, if a publishing company with editors and proofreaders can make a mistake on a published book, no one should feel they are infallible.

I’m sure you’ve found errors in books, blog posts, ads, websites, and so on. It may not be often, but it happens. Some common errors include grammatical mistakes, typographical errors, punctuation issues, and formatting discrepancies.

Achieving absolute perfection is incredibly challenging. Humans, including writers and editors, are prone to errors, and the complexity of language and the writing process introduces various opportunities for mistakes.

An article at Wired.com, “Why It's So Hard to Catch Your Own Typos,” explains, “When we're proofreading our own work, we know the meaning we want to convey. Because we expect that meaning to be there, it's easier for us to miss when parts (or all) of it are absent. The reason we don't see our own typos is because what we see on the screen is competing with the version that exists in our heads.” (1)

“Why You Can’t Spot Your Own Typos,” an article at Business Insider, explains what you can do to help you see what’s on the page. “The trick with editing, then, is to de-familiarize yourself with your words as much as possible.” (2)

So, what else can you do to get as close to an error-free manuscript as possible?

Here are 14 tips to use during the proofreading stage to help minimize errors in your final manuscript:

1. Take a Break:

Before you go from editing to proofreading, take a break. It can be an hour, a day, a week, or whatever you’re comfortable with or have time for. This will help you spot errors more easily.

2. Print it Out:

Reading from a printed manuscript gives you a different perspective.

Most of my manuscripts are picture books or chapter books, so printing them out isn’t too wasteful. I do have a problem with middle-grade or YA manuscripts, though. Aside from wasting paper, there’s the ink cost.

Instead of printing, you can change the font and text size. You can even change the background color of the document.

These tweaks will help you spot errors you would might have missed in the original.

3. Grammar and Spelling Check:

Use the grammar and spell-check functions of your word processing software. However, be aware that these tools may not catch every error, so a manual review is essential.

4. Consistency Check:

Ensure that there is consistency in spelling, formatting, and style throughout the manuscript. Check for consistent use of tense, formatting of headings, and citation style, among other elements.

In one manuscript, I had the protagonist’s name spelled wrong in two places. I went through the first proofread without catching it. Thankfully, I caught it on the second run.

5. Punctuation Review:

Carefully examine punctuation marks such as commas, periods, semicolons, and quotation marks. Pay attention to proper placement and usage.

One common mistake is to forget to add dialogue quotation marks at the beginning or end of the dialogue. This can easily happen during the editing stage if you edit the dialogue.

Here’s an example:

John raced through the house, bumping into chairs, tables, and even his big sister, Sarah. “Sorry, I’m running late.”

Now, suppose you edited it to:
“Sorry, he yelled. “I’m running late.”

Notice the missing dialogue quotation after sorry. It’s an easy miss.

6. Editing Tool:

If your budget allows, use an editing program like Grammarly or ProWritingAid. These tools can be very helpful.

They also have AI capabilities and offer suggestions on rephrasing sections of your manuscript for better understanding and tight writing, among other things.

It’s important to realize, though, that they are not infallible either.

7. Formatting Check:

Verify that your manuscript adheres to the specified formatting guidelines. This includes margins, font styles, line spacing, and other formatting requirements.

I make notes I can quickly access so I don’t have to retrace my steps to find out things like line spacing from the top of the page to the chapter heading to the chapter content.

8. Cross-Check References:

If your manuscript includes references, citations, or footnotes, double-check them for accuracy and consistency. Be sure all citations are correctly formatted and match the bibliography or reference list.

9. Check Headings and Subheadings:

Confirm that your headings and subheadings are appropriately formatted and consistent throughout the document.

It’s helpful to have notes to keep everything uniform.

10. Read Aloud:

This is a very helpful step. Reading your manuscript aloud can help you identify awkward phrasing, repetition, and errors that might be overlooked during silent reading.

If you pause while reading, the reader definitely will.

11. Review Tables and Figures:

If your manuscript includes tables, figures, or other graphical elements, make sure they are labeled and formatted correctly.

12. Check Page Numbers:

Ensure that page numbers are in the correct order and that they match any table of contents or index.

13. Final Review of Changes:

If you made revisions or edits during the proofreading process, do a final review to ensure all changes have been implemented correctly.

14. Seek Help:

Having a fresh set of eyes on the manuscript during the proofreading stage is beneficial.

Consider asking a colleague, friend (only if they know what they’re looking for), or a professional proofreader to review your work.

If your budget allows, I strongly advise hiring a professional proofreader.

Summing It Up

While achieving a completely error-free manuscript may be challenging, a thorough and diligent review process can significantly reduce the number of errors and improve the overall quality of your work.

 

References:

(1) https://www.wired.com/2014/08/wuwt-typos/
(2) https://www.businessinsider.com/why-you-cant-spot-your-own-typos-2014-8
  

This was originally published at: https://karencioffiwritingforchildren.com/2023/11/26/proofreading-the-final-frontier/ 

ABOUT THE AUTHOR

 

 

Karen Cioffi is an award-winning children’s author, working ghostwriter, rewriter, and coach (picture, chapter, and middle-grade books). If you need help with your story, visit Writing for Children with Karen Cioffi.

Karen also offers authors:

HOW TO WRITE A CHILDREN'S FICTION BOOK
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Jumpstart Your Magazine Writing

 

By Terry Whalin (@terrywhalin)

How can you write and submit exactly what the magazine editor is looking for? You get some insights from reading the submission guidelines but I’m talking about something much more specific and a simple list of topics and ideas for this publication. Seasoned magazine writers know about this tool and after reading this article, you will know about it too: a theme list. Publication editors will brainstorm this list of story ideas, post it on their website and also send it to their regular contributors. Using a theme list is a sure way to grab the reading attention of the editor. 

Recently I attended a Christian writers’ conference. It’s one of the key places where you can build relationships with editors and learn how to meet the needs of editors. If you write what an editor needs, then you are much more likely to get published than randomly writing something and sending it into the publication. If a writers’ conference is not in your plans, make plans to get to one soon. As editors, we publish people that we know, like and trust and you can build these relationships at a conference.

During an editor’s panel at this conference, I heard an editor’s cry for help. I’m not going to give the specific magazine but use this incident as a way to help you be more successful and on target with your magazine submissions. This magazine editor leads a 200,000 circulation Christian publication which publishes a theme list with their guidelines. With each monthly magazine, they publish articles outside of their theme but in particular they need articles tied to their theme. In front of the entire conference, this editor mentioned several of his projected themes did not have a single article ready for publication.

As I listened to this editor’s cry for help, I recalled my work at Decision, the publication of the Billy Graham Evangelistic Association. As associate editor, I was looking for theme related articles. For example, I needed articles about love for a February magazine (Valentine’s Day). It was not easy to get these articles even for a large circulation magazine like Decision whose circulation at that time was 1.8 million. To gather these needed theme-related articles, I would call or email some of my author friends and ask them for submissions.

If you want to be published in magazines, in general there are two options. You can write whatever you want (inspiration) and then try to find a publication for it. Or you can look at the themes an editor has created for their magazine (their needs) and write an article to meet those needs. The second approach of writing for a particular theme is more likely to be published from my experience. 

The Christian Writers Market Guide includes over 150 magazine listings. Many of these listings include the location of their guidelines and theme list. Another way to find these publications is to use Google with the search words “Christian editorial theme lists.” I instantly found several pages of Christian publications with their theme lists. 

As you meet needs of the editor (use their theme list) you will be published in magazines and become a dependable resource for your editor. Don’t overlook this important resource for your magazine articles. Writers do much more than publish books. If you write for magazines and have never published a book, call yourself a writer. 

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W. Terry Whalin, a writer and acquisitions editor lives in California. A former magazine editor and former literary agent, Terry is an acquisitions editor at Morgan James Publishing. He has written more than 60 nonfiction books including Jumpstart Your Publishing Dreams and Billy Graham. Get Terry’s recent book, 10 Publishing Myths for only $10, free shipping and bonuses worth over $200. To help writers catch the attention of editors and agents, Terry wrote his bestselling Book Proposals That $ell, 21 Secrets To Speed Your Success. Check out his free Ebook, Platform Building Ideas for Every Author. His website is located at: www.terrywhalin.com. Connect with Terry on Twitter, Facebook and LinkedIn.

Plot Devices

 

Contributed by author Margot Conor

 If you’re writing fiction, you have probably used many of these but might not even be aware that you are doing it. Plot devices are tools or techniques used by writers to advance the story, create tension, develop characters, or deliver information. In fact, most writers use plot devices instinctively, and not because they have been taught to.

That was certainly true for me.

For instance, I’ve used a Chekhov’s Gun without knowing the term—just because it “felt right” to set up something early and bring it back later. And I’ve done a time jump because I knew the story’s pace needed to shift forward to avoid dragging.

Plot devices help move the story forward, especially when the writer needs a way to get characters from Point A to Point B, a reason for conflict or urgency, or a mechanism for revealing backstory or secrets. For example, a MacGuffin (like a stolen relic or hidden document) can give your characters a concrete goal, even if the object itself isn’t that important—what matters is what people are willing to do to get it.

Devices like foreshadowing, cliffhangers, or false hope can subtly cue the audience’s feelings, build tension or dread, create mystery, and deliver satisfying twists or emotional payoffs. Misleading reading and giving them an unexpected climax is rewarding. That’s why red herrings or unreliable narrators are so common in thrillers and mysteries.

Sometimes a plot device like a flashback or a framing device isn’t just for structure—it reflects a character’s inner journey or the story’s deeper message. A mentor figure may not only train the hero but symbolize the values they must eventually embrace or transcend.

The key is not to avoid them, but to use them thoughtfully. When overused or if they are too obvious (like a contrived deus ex machina), they can feel lazy. But when woven skillfully into the story, they become invisible threads that hold the whole tapestry together.

Here is a list, in case you are not aware of the terms:

1. MacGuffin: An object or goal that drives the plot forward, but its specific nature is less important than its effect on the characters and events.
For example: Raiders of the Lost Ark: The Ark of the Covenant is pursued by all characters, but it's largely a means to fuel the chase and conflict.

2. Chekhov’s Gun: A seemingly minor detail introduced early in the story that becomes important later. The principle is: “If you show a gun in Act 1, it should go off in Act Three.”

For example: In Breaking Bad, a ricin vial introduced in early episodes becomes key to later plot developments.

3. Deus ex Machina: A sudden, unexpected solution to a seemingly unsolvable problem, often involving divine or external intervention.

For example: In The Lord of the Rings, the eagles rescuing Frodo and Sam from Mount Doom feels sudden and unearned.

4. Red Herring: A misleading clue or event meant to divert attention from the true plot or culprit, often used in mysteries.

For example: In Sherlock Holmes stories, an obvious suspect is often introduced to distract the reader from the real villain.

5. Cliffhanger: A suspenseful ending that leaves a major plot point unresolved to compel the audience to continue to the next installment.

For example: The Empire Strikes Back: The movie ends with Han Solo frozen in carbonite, unresolved.

6. Flashback: A scene set in a time earlier than the main story, used to provide background or context.

For example: In Lost, characters’ backstories are told through flashbacks in nearly every episode.

7. Foreshadowing: Hints or clues about what will happen later in the story.

For example: In Of Mice and Men, Lennie’s killing of small animals foreshadows the tragic climax.

8. Framing Device: A story within a story, where the main narrative is presented within another context. Such as a character telling a story.

For example: The Princess Bride: The fantasy story is told within the frame of a grandfather reading to his grandson.

9. Time Skip / Time Jump: A sudden jump forward in time to show consequences or shift the narrative scope.

For example: Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows ends with a 19-year time jump showing the characters as adults.

10. The Reveal / Twist Ending: A sudden revelation that changes the audience’s understanding of earlier events.

For example: The Sixth Sense: The twist that Dr. Malcolm was dead all along recontextualizes the entire film.

11. The Mentor: A wise, experienced character who guides the protagonist, often dies or steps aside, pushing the hero to grow.

For example: In Star Wars: Obi-Wan Kenobi trains Luke and sacrifices himself.

12. The Chosen One: A protagonist who is predestined to fulfill a great destiny, often without initially knowing it.

For example: In The Matrix: Neo is "The One" who will liberate humanity.

13. The Love Triangle: A romantic entanglement where a character is torn between two love interests.

For example: The Hunger Games: Katniss is caught between Peeta and Gale.

14. The Race Against Time: A scenario where characters must complete a task before a deadline or face dire consequences.

For example: In Mission: Impossible: Disarming a bomb before it explodes.

15.  The Ticking Clock: Similar to the race against time, but emphasizes suspense by continually reminding the audience of an approaching deadline.

For example: In 24: Each episode unfolds in real time, with a constant countdown.

16.The False Protagonist: A character introduced as the main focus, only to die or be sidelined early on.

For example: In Psycho: Marion Crane is killed midway, shifting focus to Norman Bates.

17. The Unreliable Narrator: A narrator whose credibility is compromised, making readers question what’s true.

For example: In Fight Club: The narrator’s split identity with Tyler Durden is a key twist.

18. The Secret Identity: A character hides their true identity, often for protection or to work undercover.

For example: Batman is Bruce Wayne. He lives a double life as Batman.

19. False Hope: When a plan appears to succeed, only to fail dramatically, escalating the stakes.

For example: In Avengers: Infinity War, the team nearly removes Thanos's gauntlet, but Star-Lord’s rage ruins the moment.

20. Plot Coupon / Fetch Quest: The protagonist must collect a set of items or complete specific tasks to progress the story.

For example: Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows: Finding and destroying the Horcruxes.

Reading Books from Other Countries or Cultures
If you read in other languages or read translations written by authors from other countries, there are a few different plot devices used. Their storytelling traditions use unique narrative structures and devices that don’t always appear in Western storytelling. Writers from different cultures may use different narrative logic.

For example, Western stories often focus on conflict and resolution. Eastern stories may emphasize contrast, balance, or enlightenment. Oral traditions may prioritize communal values, less linear structures, or ritual-based storytelling.

Knowing this can help you understand the value of their stories and why they matter in the context of their social structures.

ABOUT THE AUTHOR

Margot Conor has been writing for as long as she can remember, but it wasn't until the COVID lock-down that she had enough time to dedicate to the craft and bring something to completion. Having finished her first novel, she went through the grueling two-year process of editing. Now she has jumped into the author's world with both feet. Margot's debut multiverse adventure novel, Inverse, is available on Amazon.

She's spent the last year attending many writing retreats, seminars, and writers' events. She also listened to presentations specifically on the topic of publishing and book marketing. She will be sharing what she learns with the reader. Learn more about Margot at https://margotconor.com/

 

Children's Writing: Story, Plot, and Arcs

 Contributed by Karen Cioffi, Children's Writer

Lately, I've received a number of picture book manuscripts from potential clients who wanted quotes on editing.

Once I read over the stories, I quickly knew they weren't an editing project because there were no actual stories. They were a list of events or scenes.

It seems to be a common problem with new authors who don't take the time to learn the very basics of writing a story.

So, what exactly is a story and plot?

An article at The Write Practice uses a quote from E. M. Forster to explain the difference between story and plot: "The king died and then the queen died," is a story. "The king died, and then the queen died of grief" is a plot. (1)

The story is the basic storyline. It's the overall description of the story.

In my chapter book, Walking Through Walls, the storyline is that the protagonist wants to become rich and powerful, no matter what it takes.

The plot is in the details.

The plot of Walking Through Walls is that the protagonist wants to become rich and powerful, no matter what it takes, and he believes learning magic will get him there.

Another good example of story and plot is The Story of an Hour by Kate Chopin.

The story: Within one hour, the protagonist thinks her husband died in a train crash. Having missed the train, he comes home, and the protagonist drops dead.

The plot: The protagonist thinks her husband died in a train crash. Having missed the train, he comes home, and the protagonist drops dead, but it's not from the shock of overwhelming joy.

Paints quite a different story, doesn't it?

Now, if you have a series of events: Pickles the dog plays with a cat, then plays with a frog, then plays with a goat, then plays with a pig, you don't have a story arc or character development.

I'll have clients ask why something like the above isn't a story. The dog is having lots of fun with different animals.

Well, if it was a concept book teaching about animals, then it could work.

But if it's to be a fiction story, it doesn't work. The reason is it lacks a story arc and a character arc.

The story arc is the path the overall story takes. Every character in the story goes on this journey. It's also called the narrative arc.

According to a MasterClass article, the narrative arc "provides a backbone by providing a clear beginning, middle, and end of the story." (2)

The character arc, on the other hand, is the path the protagonist takes.

Just like the story takes the reader on a journey, so does the protagonist.

The character arc is all about the protagonist. It's him confronting a conflict or challenge, his attempts to overcome it, and his ultimate success. Through this character journey, the protagonist grows in some way. She may gain knowledge, become confident, mature, rise to challenges, or grow in some other way. But it's essential there is growth, especially when writing for children.

So, going back to Pickles the dog, he, as the protagonist, has no conflict or challenge to overcome. He doesn't grow in any way.

And as for the Pickles story, it's flat. There's no arc.

Readers won't become invested in a series of events. They want to connect to the protagonist and root for him to overcome his obstacles. They want a full story arc and character arc.

References:

(1) https://thewritepractice.com/plot/
(2) https://www.masterclass.com/articles/what-are-the-elements-of-a-narrative-arc-and-how-do-you-create-one-in-writing/

ABOUT THE AUTHOR 

Karen Cioffi is an award-winning children’s author, working ghostwriter, rewriter, and coach (picture, chapter, and middle-grade books). If you need help with your story, visit Writing for Children with Karen Cioffi.

You can check out Karen's fiction books HERE.

You can connect with Karen at:
LinkedIn: https://www.linkedin.com/in/karencioffiventrice
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/kcioffiventrice/
Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/karencioffikidlitghostwriter/

 

The Power of Psychological Tension

 Contributed by Margot Conor

  Psychological tension is the heartbeat of a compelling story. From the very first line, you want your readers to be hooked. Through mental strain, uncertainty, or distress your characters grapple with their choices, and your reader feels invested in their journey. Due to conflicting emotions, thoughts, or circumstances tension builds and holds your audience in suspense.

This tension is a fundamental driver of storytelling, as it captivates readers by immersing them in a character’s struggles and by raising the stakes. Whether through internal dilemmas, interpersonal conflicts, or external pressures, psychological tension is the force that keeps readers engaged and invested in the outcome of a story.

A story without tension feels flat and directionless. Tension propels the plot forward, urging readers to turn pages as they yearn to see how conflicts unfold and whether characters will overcome their struggles. When a protagonist is placed in a difficult situation, forced to make tough decisions, or floundering with deep-seated fears, their journey becomes compelling. Readers emotionally invest in characters who face genuine challenges, particularly when those challenges feel insurmountable or deeply personal.

Internal conflict arises when a character struggles with their own emotions, desires, or beliefs. Examples include a hero torn between duty and love, or a detective battling their own past while trying to solve a case. The deeper the internal conflict, the more emotionally engaging the story becomes.

Interpersonal conflict is all about the relationships between characters which often drives tension, whether through misunderstandings, betrayal, or unspoken desires.

Romantic tension, rivalry, or power struggles add layers to the narrative, making interactions feel charged and unpredictable.

Situational conflict is created by external circumstances, such as being trapped in a high-stakes environment, racing against time, or facing overwhelming odds. The pressure from external forces can push characters to their limits, forcing growth and transformation.

While tension should build throughout a story, its resolution is equally crucial. Readers want that payoff. Some stories resolve tension with a satisfying conclusion, providing closure for both characters and readers. Others escalate it, leading to unexpected twists or unresolved endings that leave lasting impressions. The key is ensuring that whatever resolution occurs, it feels earned and meaningful within the story’s context.

To effectively incorporate psychological tension, you need to understand how to construct scenarios that amplify uncertainty and emotional stakes. Here are some techniques you might try:

Unresolved Questions: Leaving crucial details ambiguous creates suspense and compels readers to keep reading in search of answers.

Moral Dilemmas: Presenting characters with choices that have no easy solutions enhances tension and deepens engagement.

Foreshadowing and Dramatic Irony: Giving readers insight into potential dangers before characters become aware heightens tension.

Slow Reveals: Withholding key information and revealing it gradually sustains suspense.

Contrasting Emotions: Moments of joy juxtaposed with looming dread create an emotional rollercoaster for readers.

ABOUT THE AUTHOR

Margot Conor has been writing for as long as she can remember, but it wasn't until the COVID lock-down that she had enough time to dedicate to the craft and bring something to completion. Having finished her first novel, she went through the grueling two-year process of editing. Now she has jumped into the author's world with both feet. Margot's debut multiverse adventure novel, Inverse, is available on Amazon.

She's spent the last year attending many writing retreats, seminars, and writers' events. She also listened to presentations specifically on the topic of publishing and book marketing. She will be sharing what she learns with the reader. Learn more about Margot at https://margotconor.com/

Common Children's Writing Mistakes

 I attended a webinar through Children's Book Insider (CBI) with traditionally published children’s authors Jean Daigneau and Gloria Adams. They had some very helpful tips.

One section I found interesting was about the BIG common mistakes that authors make with children’s books.

1. The number ONE most common big mistake is a weak plot.

So, what does a weak plot mean?

No conflict, or very little.

Basically…

The main character needs to have a problem. It can be internal or external, but it needs to be something that has consequences attached to it.

The conflict doesn’t need to be life or death; it may be that he figures out a way to stop a bully. Or, she figures out a way to get the bike she wants. It could even be that he was lonely and finds a friend.

It does need to be something that will get the young reader engaged.

It’s the conflict that will make the reader become invested in the main character’s journey. It’s the conflict that will motivate the reader to read to the end.

2. The number two most common mistake is the lack of a story arc.

A story needs a full story arc. A beginning, a middle, and an end, and within that structure, there needs to be rising conflict.

There also needs to be a satisfying resolution to that conflict.

This is commonly known as Freytag’s Pyramid.

The story starts on the left side of the pyramid. The action and conflict climb up to the peak (the climax). Then, it’s down the right side with falling action and the resolution.

3. Another big mistake is the lack of a character arc.

The character needs to grow in some way.  

He needs to change in some way as a result of his journey to overcome the obstacle blocking him from reaching his goal.

The character may become kinder, happier, more confident, smarter, physically stronger, emotionally stronger, more creative, or less fearsome. You get the gist.

He shouldn’t be the same person he was at the beginning of the journey.

When you look at the character at the beginning of the story and then at the end, he needs to be different. There needs to be some kind of growth.

Some of the SMALLER mistakes or problems authors make are:

1. Double tags.

Here’s an example:

Pete threw his fist in the air. “If he does that again, I don’t know what I’ll do,” he said.

This is a double tag.

It’s already established that Pete is talking because he’s noted throwing his fist in the air. The “he said” shouldn’t be included.

If you know the reader will understand who’s talking, you don’t add a dialogue tag.

2. Picture books and illustrations.

If you’re writing a picture book, take the illustrations into account.

Write with them in mind. Leave enough room for the illustrator to be creative and bring the story to another level.

3. Illustrator notes.

It may be tempting to try to direct the illustrator with a lot of illustrator notes but don’t do it.

Unless it’s something the illustrator wouldn’t know but needs to know, don’t mention it.

An example of this:

Your protagonist has a dog, and you want it to be a specific color and breed. This is something you can note, as the illustrator certainly wouldn’t know about it.

4. Candy-coating the story.

A number of my clients don’t want anything bad to happen to the characters in the story. This is especially true of picture books.

But it’s tough to have conflict if nothing bad can happen to the characters.

The best stories, even if fantasy, have realism in them.

5. Unsatisfying ending.

The ending of your story is important to get right.

All loose ends must be tied up. And, especially in picture books and writing for young children, the ending must be satisfying.

The reader should go away feeling good about the story.

Another important aspect of the ending is to NOT tell the reader what the message of the story is.

The takeaway value of the story should be subtly conveyed through the story itself. Don’t hit the reader over the head with it.

Winding this up...

A good story needs it all. It needs conflict with rising action and resolution. It needs character growth with a subtle message.

The best way to incorporate all this into your story is to read a lot of traditionally published books in the genre you’re writing. Pay attention to what makes those books work.

ABOUT THE AUTHOR 

 

 

Karen Cioffi is an award-winning children’s author, working ghostwriter, rewriter, and coach (picture, chapter, and middle-grade books). If you need help with your story, visit Writing for Children with Karen Cioffi.

You can check out Karen's books at:
https://karencioffiwritingforchildren.com/karens-books/

You can connect with Karen at:
LinkedIn: https://www.linkedin.com/in/karencioffiventrice
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/kcioffiventrice/
Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/karencioffikidlitghostwriter/
 

Dialogue Tags: He Said, She Replied

 

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 Contributed by Karen Cioffi, Children's Writer

 

I'm rewriting a young adult book for a client. It's over 100,000 words.

With that many words, the author felt compelled to mix up the dialogue tags.

That, though, is never a good idea.

Some of the tags he used were spat, laughed, teased, smirked, joked, yawned, and sneered.

But my client isn't the only one who doesn't realize that there are specific words for dialogue tags. That might be because new authors aren't familiar with the tag's purpose.

So, what exactly is a dialogue tag and how should you use it?

According to The Write Practice, "they 'tag' the dialogue to a particular character. Also often referred to as an attribution, a dialogue tag is a small phrase either before, after, or in between the actual dialogue itself."
https://thewritepractice.com/dialogue-tags/

That puts it pretty simple.

Dialogue tags are phrases that identify who is speaking. They are a must for clarity and in order to keep the reader in the know and involved in the story.

A few examples:

"What was that?" asked John.

"I couldn't finish my homework," John said.

"If I go to the store," John said, "I'll pick up milk."

So, you can see that dialogue tags are straight forward. They allow the reader to know who's talking.

The basic tags are said, replied, asked, and answered. These tags kind of become invisible to the reader. The reader can acknowledge who is talking while not thinking twice about the tag.

But when the basics just aren't enough, you can also use whispered, shouted, mumbled. They should be used sparingly, though.

So, going back to dialogue tags that shouldn't be used, I did a search and was surprised at the results.

One site had a list of dialogue tags that included, emitted, bubbled, chuckled, grinned, sang, smiled, and rejoiced.

Another site had grieved, mewled, bawled, blubbered, fretted, agonized, comforted, admired, hissed, soothed, glowered, placated, assented, tittered, and sobbed, stating they could be used as dialogue tags.

This may be one of the reasons why some writers feel it's okay to use these words.

A good way to think about whether a word can be used as a tag is to think of the word and what it means.

You can't blubber dialogue.
You can't admire dialogue.
You can't comfort dialogue.
You can't sneer dialogue.
You can't tease dialogue.
You can't emit dialogue.
You can't spit dialogue. Although you may spit as you talk.

Dialogue tags and adverbs.

This is another common problem that can arise with dialogue and tags - the use of adverbs.

My client did a lot of this as well.

Using an adverb after a tag looks like this:

"Don't bother getting up," John said angrily.

"You're beautiful," John said admiringly.

"Get out of my chair," John said, disgruntled.

Instead of using adverbs, the sentence or paragraph should show how the character is feeling.

Ellen couldn't open her eyes. Crying all night left them swollen and achy. "How could this happen?"

Showing what's going on allows the reader to know how she's feeling. You wouldn't need to add "sadly" at the end of the tag.

Do you always have to use dialogue tags?

Another question that can come up about dialogue tags is whether they have to be used all the time.

The answer is no, as long as it's clear who's speaking.

John shook his head. "No way. I'm not going."

"You've got to," said Pete.

"No, I don't."

In this simple example, you can see that only one of the dialogues has a tag.

The first one notes who's talking by using: John shook his head.

The dialogue that comes after that is from John.

The third dialogue line is John responding to Pete. As there are only two characters in the scene, the reader will know John is speaking.

Writing dialogue is easy once you get the hang of it.

A good way to learn how to write dialogue with proper tags is to read a lot of traditionally published books. Pay attention to the dialogue.

It's not that I'm putting down self-published books, I've self-published two books. The problem is not all self-published books are done professionally.

Traditionally published books have professionals editing them; they have gatekeepers to ensure the story is quality. They know the ropes and it's important to learn from books that are done right.

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How to Repurpose Your Radio Interviews

By Terry Whalin (@terrywhalin)

As an author, you want to hire a publicist who has connections to radio and podcast hosts and can book you on those programs.  As an editor, I’ve encouraged some of my authors to book radio interviews. After the interviews, one author told me he didn’t believe they helped sell books. Then I asked some follow-up questions. Did you get the recording from the interview? Are you storing that interview on your website, so it does not disappear? This author was not taking any of those important follow-up actions. In this article, I want to help you increase the effectiveness and longevity of your interviews.

As an author, your publicist will schedule you on various radio programs. These radio programs are wonderful opportunities to talk about your book. The talk show host normally receives a series of interview questions ahead of time. These radio hosts interview different authors day after day on their program. You can’t assume the host has read your book—and you are better off assuming they have not read your book. Instead, they will use the interview questions to speak with you about your book. 

For example, I’ve done more than 50 radio interviews about Billy Graham and my biography. I’m asked the same questions over and over. Yet each time, I answer them with enthusiasm as though I’m hearing the question for the first time. Depending on the radio program, often these shows only cover a certain area of the United States. How do you get more mileage from these interviews?

First, ask for a recording of the interview. Sometimes the radio station will put it on their site after the interview. Other times if you ask, they will email the audio file to you. You have to ask for it or search for it and preserve this audio file.

With this audio file in your possession, the next step is to listen to it. Is it a solid recording? Do you need to cut out local commercials or anything to make it universal and just your interview? I use an audio program called SoundForge for this editing process. Just like Microsoft Word edits words, you can use SoundForge to edit audio files.

I create or check to make sure I have a solid recording of my interview. Next I upload the audio file to my own hosting site. If I just link to the interview from someone else’s site, they are in control and I’ve had these links disappear. When I put it on my own site, I know the interview is always going to be available online and never disappear. You have to make sure you preserve the interview on a site that you control.

The final step is to incorporate this interview into your on-going social media efforts (X/Twitter, Facebook and LinkedIn). Here’s an example from one of my radio interviews about my Billy Graham book: http://terrylinks.com/KPOFGrahamInt The interview was recorded months ago, yet because it was a morning radio show, it sounds like it happened yesterday. The listener doesn’t need to know the real date.

Because I reuse these interviews, people will regularly email me saying they heard my interview and compliment me. I respond with gratitude and never say when it actually happened (not relevant information for that listener). These recordings continue to promote and drive book sales and exposure for my book—long after the interview. Like many of these actions in the marketing area, they do not happen unless the author takes control of the interview (storing it on your website) then continues to promote it.

Promoting your book on the radio or a podcast is important and something every author should actively pursue and continue. In my view, it is equally important what you do with these recordings after the interview. Use these live events for on-going and continued promotion of your book and work. These interviews are essentially timeless and can be used repeatedly if you take action. 

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W. Terry Whalin, a writer and acquisitions editor lives in California. A former magazine editor and former literary agent, Terry is an acquisitions editor at Morgan James Publishing. He has written more than 60 nonfiction books including Jumpstart Your Publishing Dreams and Billy Graham. Get Terry’s recent book, 10 Publishing Myths for only $10, free shipping and bonuses worth over $200. To help writers catch the attention of editors and agents, Terry wrote his bestselling Book Proposals That $ell, 21 Secrets To Speed Your Success. Check out his free Ebook, Platform Building Ideas for Every Author. His website is located at: www.terrywhalin.com. Connect with Terry on Twitter, Facebook and LinkedIn.

How to Make Writing Come Alive for Readers and Writers Alike

Carolyn doing what she preaches, spreading the word, having the fun!

Connecting to Authors Counts

 

Carolyn Rants About How to Make Reading
 Feel Like the Real Thing

 

By Carolyn Howard-Johnson, novelist, poet and multi award-winning author 
of the #HowToDoItFrugallySeries of Books for Writers

 

Many years ago when I was beginning to dedicate myself to writing—meaning writing real books and not having other work to attend to, the LA Times reported that Harper Collins had hatched a program to “draw authors and readers together.”

What a wonderful concept! It seems new at the time, a possibility that could be nurtured with the coming of the Internet. And, yes, I’m being facetious. 

 The giant publisher offered up their big-name authors for an “Invite the Author” program. Authors like Ann Patchett (author of Bel Canto) and Wally Lamb (author of This Much I Know is True) would speak by phone to the members of a very few book clubs—chosen by lottery, no less! It seemed like a great idea to me. I was working on my the first book soon to become part of a series for writers (The Frugal Book Promoter, now in its third edition).

Of course this was a new idea of inspired by the best of marketing’s intentions—to make PR more about serving the public than mere “selling” which was okay by me especially since they publish lots of excellent titles that can be classified as literary, a genre I saw as losing ground since my days as an English major. What T’d me off is that these ladies from one of the chosen clubs, the Digressing Divas Book Club in Michigan, were so excited because they “had never met an author or talked to one before.” Can you imagine? Weren’t bookstores doing that? Libraries? But it me realize there must be avid readers who think that authors are a bit untouchable. It convinced me of what I had started to observe on my own. We all could do more but the newly minted POD authors otherwise known as the self-published had been eschewing marketing of all kinds because from what they observed it was a job for publishers and beneath the talents of creatives—that is, authors! 

Today, things have changed. I was a slog to get us to realize that not matter how we publish we are at least in part responsible for our own book’s success, our own relationships with our readers. Many authors of literary works (and other genres, too) had been keeping themselves cloistered but not all. Today even the most literary, most hightly paid ones have websites—even participate on the content we find there.  They have easily accessed e-mail addresses. They have blogs and newsletters! They have bared their very souls to their readers in their writing, for heaven’s sakes!

Today it’s easy to find authors. Look up their names on Google. Once found, visit their site and sign their guest books. Most (at least the smart ones) would be pleased to send you a signed bookplate if you ask. Most will answer your note.

Lacking an e-mail address or an interactive feature on their website, authors can be reached by writing to their publisher who passes these letters on to the author. This is not a new process. It has been going on for decades. What a concept! A personal letter with the distinct possibility that a reader will get a personal note back complete with a valued signature! 

Oh, and book signings. Well, granted some big chains got awfully uppity about who they allowed to appear on their premises, but most towns, large and small have realized the potential for an author to visit and chat with book lovers. So, if “Digressing Divas” everywhere are all that excited about chatting with authors, maybe they should be telling their bookstore proprietors about their needs. In fact there are lots of ways they can keep that author-reader relationship ball rolling:

~What would happen if B&N invited an author from a small press so their customers could get copy of an autographed first novel, maybe even a honest-to-goodness first edition? 

~And what if they actually promoted this new author? 

~And what if the people who came actually found a new voice, a new author to adore?

~“Digressing Divas” could also hound their libraries a bit. A former Nobel prize nominee, Dr. Alicia Ghiragossian, Stephen Veres, author of A Light in the Distance, and I spoke on “The Three Faces of Tolerance” at our local library. Other authors like Pat Morrison, Vincent Bugliosi and poet Bart Edelman have spoken to those in our not-so-large community as part of this same series. None of us said “No.” Some of these authors may someday be the Oateses or Faulkners or Roths of the literary world with—or without the help of a publisher.

Here’s more proof: We now have a Literacy Day. This year it’s on Mon, Sep 8, 2025.  We might still not have an opportunity to find the world’s most famous authors at every bookstore or featured on every segment of Ali Velshi’s book club (MSNBC), but it’s an opportunity to meet people who write, people with opinions and people with talent.

Our “Diva” book-clubbers could invite authors to come talk to their clubs, these days, especially if one live in their town or even region. I know several authors who have spoken to as few as twelve avid readers cozied around the fireplace at a club member’s home. One of those is Leora G. Krygier, author of First the Raven.

Some authors even teach at colleges in your area. Author Beverly J. Scott even took a road tour in one of her collectible Edsels so she could meet people in small towns!

 

Real Ideas for Making Readers and Authors Who Read
 Feel More Connected 

 

• Write to authors when you’ve read their books.
• Look up an author on Amazon.com. She may even have a link to a special biography page and/or an e-mail address.
• Check out AuthorsDen.com. Wow! What an array of writers!
• Attend book signings. Occasionally attend even if you haven’t ever read a book by the starring author.
• Join groups that invite authors to speak. Even investment groups are known to do that. I know. I was among the 300 guests in the banquet hall!
• Attend your local library’s events.
• Let your bookstore know when you have read something you enjoy, especially if you had to go to Amazon.com to buy it. Ask them to invite that author to visit their store.
• Read your paper’s Book Review section (you’ll sometimes find them in sections labeled “Opinion” or “Voices” these days); use some of the website addresses you find there to contact publishers and authors.
• Most of all, just ask for your bookish little heart’s desire. You might get it. Cross-promotion among authors is known to be one of the best promotions of all.
• If you find an author who isn’t receptive, find yourself another.

 

 

MORE ABOUT THE “WRITERS ON THE MOVE” CONTRIBUTOR

 

Howard-Johnson is the recipient of the California Legislature’s Woman of the Year in Arts and Entertainment Award, and her community’s Character and Ethics award for her work promoting tolerance with her writing. She was also named to Pasadena Weekly’s list of “Fourteen San Gabriel Valley women who make life happen” and was given her community’s Diamond Award for Achievement in the Arts.  Carolyn writes nonfiction for writers, poetry, and fiction and has studied writing at Cambridge University in the United Kingdom; Herzen University in St. Petersburg, Russia; and Charles University, Prague. She is also celebrating more than a year of writing this column for Susan Violante’s First Chapter Plus and occasionally contributes to Reader Views’ blog as well. Please follow her author’s profile page on Amazon at https://bit.ly/CarolynsAmznProfile to receive notice of her new books right to your e-mail address.